大家看看我写的关于烤鸭的小段子,看看可读性如何?

大家看看我写的关于烤鸭的小段子,看看可读性如何?

不需看用词,不需看语法,只需要看可读性好不好,是否可以毫不费力读下来?若能点评一二,更佳。


Can I tell you My Roast Duck story?


It took me more than ten years to realize the tasty side of Roast Duck skin, until I ate it in a boutique Beijing restaurant last year. It was roasted just at the right time, crispy, melt in mouth instantly. The skin of Roast Duck could be very greasy if go to the wrong place just like I did in the past, wherever cheap or expensive. But the duck skin in that restaurant changed my mind forever.

Only eating at the right place can get the right delicious food, no matter for a local foodie or for a foreign tourist just eating it once in lifetime. It took me years as a local, how do you think about the food you are going to eat if you are a visitor?


谢谢!!

[ 本帖最后由 张老师125 于 2018-2-8 20:20 编辑 ]
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个人意见:能看懂,但还不算地道顺畅。
举例:
It took me years as a local,这句表达就感觉尤其的不太好

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回复 沙发 的帖子

@loveFluffy 谢谢,能看懂就行。。。具体文字留给母语人士拿捏去。。。
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tasty side是个啥。

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中考作文?

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回复 地板 的帖子

@lance6716 谢谢。。。
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回复 5楼 的帖子

@蝶殇之魂 谢谢。。。
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